--湖南省涟源市第二中学 曾 省 初
2004年高考英语书面表达（湖南卷）要求考生对两幅画进行看图作文。文体是议论文，话题是反映城市居住环境存在的一些问题（如空气污染，交通拥挤），重点描述去乡村度假，感受田园生活的乐趣。选材来源于现实生活，贴近考生实际，使考生有一种亲切感。考生有话可说，有句可写。有利于高校选拔优秀人才。
[考生佳作]
I am a middle school student in a city and now I am looking forward to the summer vacation. That’s because I have made up my mind to spend my summer holiday in a countryside.
As is known to all, there are many cars and buses in the city which almost drive people and because of the traffic jam. What’s more, air is polluted by factories. To my joy, air is fresh in the country. There are so many hills that I can climb one whenever I like. There are so many small rivers . Maybe I can get some fish from it. Besides, I can travel the country by boat. I hear there are many kinds of fruits. So I can eat some fruits which I like. In a word, I like the life of the countryside and I’m sure I can enjoy myself there.
[名师点评]
1） 本文要点齐全，语言得体，行文合符逻辑。
2） 表达句式丰富多彩，发挥紧扣主题。
3） that’s because, as is known to all, what’s worse, besides ,so, in a word等连接词的有效使用，使全文结构紧扣，也是本文得分的基点，体现了考生较高的写作水平和较强的语言运用能力，完全达到了预期的写作测试目标。
作者： 曾省初
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